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Writer's Group Night

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Sometimes you just forget stuff; that's the way it goes.

Wednesday night I had my writer's group meeting. We meet once a month, and people can put their names on a list to have something they wrote presented to the group. We also try to encourage people to bring something just in case someone doesn't show up who's supposed to be presenting.

I decided to take something to present this time around, though it wasn't my turn. I'm working on a book with someone where I write the stories, or scenarios, and she's supposed to be analyzing them. Course, I've got a feeling that the analyzing part isn't going to happen any time soon, but so be it.

Anyway, two people didn't show who were supposed to present, and only one of the people on the standby list had something, so I got to have my story presented. I asked our group moderator to read it because the story was about a woman who was having a bad day, and I thought it would sound better if she read it. I also wanted to sit back to see what it sounded like, which sometimes helps me figure out if something isn't right.

Well, I forgot two things. One, though there's no bad words in the story, there's a very racy part that, because I wrote it, I just never really thought much about. And two, the woman I asked to read my story out loud is an ordained minister.

So, at a certain point in the story, I'm listening with my eyes closed when the reader stops for some reason, and suddenly everyone is giggling. I open my eyes and she's totally red, and that's what everyone was laughing at. She looks at me and says "Now I know why you wanted me to read it." I laughed, then said no, that wasn't it, but if she could get through that part she'd like how it ends. So she proceeds, but has to get through a second racy part that made her flush a second time, and of course the room was full of giggling and outright laughter, which wasn't really supposed to happen, but hey, circumstances called for it at that moment.

When she finally did make it through to the end she looked at me, said it did resolve itself well, but she wasn't going to trust me to read anything else I came up with. Luckily, they all liked the story, though they said I didn't get her reaction to drinking too much correct (I've never had a drink, so I have nothing to base it on except what I've seen) and some of the language might have been dated (what, young people don't say "man" anymore?).

Still, this shows how you can get so close to something that you forget that others may react to a stimulus differently than you will. C'est la vie!

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See, now you know, catfish! lol

It is so different when it's in your head, isn't it? Like with the language my characters used in that first script. Once you asked me about it, I realized that I never fully explained their blue-blood backgroud, but expected that the audience would get that because they're rich! DUH! Rich doesn't automatically = blue-blood! LOL

That's too funny that she turned so red. But, it makes the world of difference to have someone read it, doesn't it? I read a book not long ago my brother gave me and it was really good. The only issue I had was the author was writing about teenagers and clearly hadn't been AROUND teenagers since the 80's! Not only did he have them use 80's slang but also had them reference 80's rock stars that NO teenager today would reference or maybe even know! Oh, and the publishing date was only a couple years ago. It's the sort of thing a good editor will catch, but for now - just change all the "man's" to "dude" and you'll be ok. ;-)

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For some reason, Spooky,...

I can't imagine a hot looking woman of around 28 years old calling some guy at a dance club "dude". :-)

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Er, catfish

Actually, Catfish, "dude" is EXACTLY what a hot 28 yr old would call someone at a club! lol That's what she'd call the guy, that's what she'd call her girlfriends. It is used generically anymore and a lot! It started a couple of years ago and has spread like wildfire. I don't use it as much as I used to, but still do. My brother's girlfriend is in her late 20's and uses it ALL THE TIME when talking to me or anyone else she's close with. For instance - "Dude! Dude! Did you hear what your brother just said to me???". And, if a night club is the situation she'd very much not say "man". Anymore, "man" is only used when saying something like "Man it was hot!" - but even then, they're more likely to use something else. Just a sign of the times. We all joke about it from time to time - how odd it is for a girl to be called dude. But, it is what it is. And, a former co-worker in Big Spring - all of 24 yrs old - calls absolutely everyone dude. Trust me on this one. It may go against "logic" but it's what all the cool kids are saying! LOL

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Really Spooky?

I am out of it. Funny thing is that "dude" was part of my youth then it went away, and it's odd that it's come back because slang terms don't usually reappear like that. Hmmm,...

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No Catfish

You just hang out with grown-ups! Ya, it was a slang term from back in the day and I'm pretty sure it was picked up again from movies where the 80's was an influence. 'Dude, Where's My Car?' is one example. But, other 80's slang have reappeared, like "gnarly" and it was used this go-round to describe something ugly. I just seem to forever be surrounded by youngin's! lol And, of course, I watch a lot of "teenage" comedies like 'Accepted' and 'American Pie'.

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Ah, now the movie thing, Spooky,...

that would do me in, since I don't watch today's teen comedies or horror movies, and in action movies and certain other movies I do go to see, there's not a lot of updated pop references. And, truthfully, most of the Sci-Fi stuff I watch usually doesn't have a lot of slang because it's supposed to be futuristic. And I don't know any kids; ugh!

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for someone like me

it pays off to watch all those movies - and, of course I do enjoy them! I guess it could make it harder if you don't enjoy the kinds of juvenile crap that I do! But, that's what the web is for - all the slang you'd need without the annoying conversations! LOL

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