Vampires, and Driads, and Demons oh my!

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Hello all I keep having this series of dreams over and over again and I can't help but think they would make an absolutely wonderful story.
The dream starts out colorful and lavish explosions of light burst all around as people in a ball room spin and twirl. The main character a young prince (of course) is dancing and mingling until he takes a drink which was poisoned (oh my!). Choking he grasps his hands around his neck tugging at his collar, all the colors of the ball on every one every place begin to melt off and onto the floor. From the other end of the room members of the inquisition burst in in drab robes with swords drawn (no one expects the Spanish inquisition!). Feeling his face the prince pricks his hand on a new set of fangs (apparently their is a poison that turns you into a vampire) he runs from the inquisition falling and tripping in the sludgy mixture of colors.
After getting outside the prince starts running, and running and running lol until finally he passes out in a field. As day time comes his skin begins to flake and burn off but alas his ass is out cold. Luckily a beautiful forest borders the field and a lovely dryad notices the vampires plight. the dryad despite the fact that she may die if separated from the forest to long runs out laying on top of the vampire to keep the sun from burning him. When night comes the vampire wakes the dryad is weary they talk for a bit he then saves her by bringing her to the woods. She tells him the only thing she wants is to venture across the world and see things away from her little forest. The prince wicked sweet as he is promises to save her some day. He then runs away finds his master bad stuff there he says he wishes to save the dryad the vampire tells him its impossible they are controlled by trees (which apparently the spirit of every tree any place is evil) who create dryads by stealing the souls of lost travelers. Only to defeat the spirit of the tree can you save the spirit. i am sure you can guess what happens from here. On a last note for some cool reason vampires seem to be good guys in this setting.

Alright folks please give me some insight would this make a totally awesome book or not. If not what would make it better. Thats about it for now once I finish up some of my projects for Aegri Somnia Press I will link ya.

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IntricateGirl's picture

Ok, here's my suggestion.

I think if you can write it properly, this would turn it into an Anne Rice level work. Feel free to take it or leave it, you won't hurt my feelings either way. (But if you become rich off my suggestion, send a shout out my way. lol)

The colors part is a bit odd. In the very small part you've listed, I see no reason for it to be included. The story can have little subplots, but make sure you are always progressing towards the end. If it doesn't do that, it should probably go.

Now, the big suggestion... I would like to see the vampire conquer the tree in the climax of the book where he cuts it down. She is injured however, and he turns her into a vampire to save her life, but she is still part dryad. He makes her a coffin to sleep in, made from the wood of the tree. Now, what I think would take it a step further, and would also allow for a sequel while still providing closure within this book, is to make it where the spirit of the tree is not released simply by cutting it down. So they have this imprisioned tree spirit that they are hauling all over the world, and it is both fighting and helping them the whole way.

But if you want to be like them, you'll have to emulate. -Ayria

Very good suggestions some

Very good suggestions some of which I was thinking about I did not think about him making her a coffin.

Ok to answer some of your questions this is what I have gathered from my dream.

-The church has created a poison that turns people into vampires. They did this so that they could easily make any political adversaries look like demon worshipers and then take them out with full support of the people(even if this might happen to be the king ~_^)

-The reason for the colors and stuff is that the poison causes you to become fatigued and hallucinate (that way your easy prey).

-Vampires can not typically reproduce through the common bite its just through the poison until the end when the love of our vampire prince creates a whole new breed of vampire awwwww how cliche lol.

-I do like the idea of the coffin must steal and of course give credit where it is due.

-As for a sequel I was thinking maybe now that these two characters know that they have power as well as a means to reproduce will they stay the path of the morally stalwart hero or falter and become sinister villains seeking vengeance on the church destroying any one who stands in their way...guess you'll have to read it to find out.

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